Comments on: It was over (part three)

By: moondustwriter

moondustwriter — Mon, 26 Jul 2010 22:55:35 +0000

thanks Tom may look for op for submission – we will see. have two endings

tom — Mon, 26 Jul 2010 22:20:53 +0000

wow…this has a ton of potential–could be rewritten with loads more detail. nice

moondustwriter — Mon, 26 Jul 2010 12:52:44 +0000

thanks glad you liked – still needs work

pattiken — Mon, 26 Jul 2010 08:48:42 +0000

You have a talent for suspense, Leslie. This read like a mystery novel.

moondustwriter — Mon, 26 Jul 2010 02:51:04 +0000

Jeff coming from you I know there is a complement

moondustwriter — Mon, 26 Jul 2010 02:49:11 +0000

Thanks Baino – tho I think I will stick with my day job

moondustwriter — Mon, 26 Jul 2010 02:46:33 +0000

Ha – you should read my other ending

G-Man — Sun, 25 Jul 2010 19:52:04 +0000

Leslie Hitchcock!
Most Excellent story My Friend…
A+

Baino — Sun, 25 Jul 2010 07:00:33 +0000

You have a knack for plot Leslie, love the ‘freeze frame’ idea.

JeffScape — Sun, 25 Jul 2010 00:04:21 +0000

There’s a framework here. Situation, plot, character… it’s all there. But there’s also the hint of impatience in the writing.

Still, I’ve never seen anything even remotely like this from you before. Many, many kudos.