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Shooting stars (microfiction monday)

July 26, 2010 by moondustwriter

The moon crested over the hill

Its regal position

displaced by five shooting stars

that flecked the sky

What she lost that night a galaxy gained

Please go to Stony River for more Microfiction Monday

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Posted in Uncategorized | Tagged loss, micro fiction, moon shooting star, moondustwriter | 32 Comments

32 Responses

  1. on July 26, 2010 at 6:56 am anthonynorth

    What a perfect ending. Excellent.


  2. on July 26, 2010 at 7:09 am G-Man

    Fantastic take in this Pic Moon…
    Welcome to Micro-Monday!!


    • on July 26, 2010 at 10:25 am moondustwriter

      thanks G


  3. on July 26, 2010 at 7:21 am Sylvia Kirkwood

    Love your take for MM! Sad but beautiful. Hope you have a great week!

    Sylvia


    • on July 26, 2010 at 10:25 am moondustwriter

      Thank you Sylvia


  4. on July 26, 2010 at 8:26 am Peggy

    Sad one but hopeful too.
    Now there are 5 new angels up there looking out for her!
    Have a great Monday.


    • on July 26, 2010 at 10:26 am moondustwriter

      The plight of a mother who has lost always sad – thanks


  5. on July 26, 2010 at 8:41 am southlakesmom

    Wow! This is beautiful! A lot of thought must have gone into this!

    One correction — the apostrophe in ‘it’s’ is unnecessary. It’s the only possessive that doesn’t get one — and it’s because the contraction it is does…so you can have one more character if you need it! But I don’t think you need it at all.


    • on July 26, 2010 at 10:27 am moondustwriter

      Thanks – for the correction


  6. on July 26, 2010 at 8:42 am Jingle

    well put.
    lovely image is matched by your witty words.


    • on July 26, 2010 at 10:27 am moondustwriter

      thanks sweet Ji


  7. on July 26, 2010 at 10:18 am Ellie

    Ooo. . .I like this one. The last line is something special.

    Have a great week x


    • on July 26, 2010 at 10:27 am moondustwriter

      appreciate that


  8. on July 26, 2010 at 10:50 am Monkey Man

    Change. The only consistent in our lives. Nice one. I gave it a go today too.


  9. on July 26, 2010 at 11:58 am Kavita

    What one loses, another gains indeed!
    I loved the way you juxtaposed the shooting stars into your poem :)


    • on July 26, 2010 at 1:39 pm moondustwriter

      that is a good way to look at it. poor mother


  10. on July 26, 2010 at 12:08 pm Deber Klein

    A lovely, bittersweet story. Thanks. Do you know who the illustrator was?


    • on July 26, 2010 at 1:40 pm moondustwriter

      I don’t know the illustrator tho would love to see more of his or her work


  11. on July 26, 2010 at 12:54 pm Me a writer?

    Let’s hear it for the galaxy. I’ve gone for science for today’s 140


    • on July 26, 2010 at 1:40 pm moondustwriter

      I caught you quantum physics lesson my friend – I’ll stick with the moon thank you


  12. on July 26, 2010 at 1:46 pm Michael

    Fantastic-very well done!

    Congratulations!


  13. on July 26, 2010 at 1:47 pm Cindy

    Stellar, in every sense of the word. Loved it!


  14. on July 26, 2010 at 2:49 pm Sylvia Morice

    Very sad and touching. I especially love the last line–poetic, for sure.


    • on July 26, 2010 at 3:57 pm moondustwriter

      thanks Sylvia for the visit – like the visual prompt


  15. on July 26, 2010 at 3:11 pm slpmartin

    Very nice poem Leslie…and must agree the last line was very special within the poem.


    • on July 26, 2010 at 3:58 pm moondustwriter

      thanks – ya know how some words literally slip off the pen – that one did


  16. on July 26, 2010 at 5:40 pm buttercup600

    So sad but touched my heart…you have a way with words Leslie. It seems I’m always the last to leave a comment because of the time difference!! Better late than never my friend :)


  17. on July 26, 2010 at 7:02 pm Just Me

    Lovely, truly.
    -C


  18. on July 27, 2010 at 5:04 am Tony Single

    Actually, this made me think of a mother learning to let go of her children. That’s weird, huh? But there you go, that’s what I thought. Brilliantly written, Moon. :)


  19. on July 27, 2010 at 5:41 pm Susan at Stony River

    Oh! What an ending, and beautifully done — you took me by surprise, wonderfully.


    • on July 27, 2010 at 8:14 pm moondustwriter

      Thanks Susan it was great meeting some microfiction folks


  20. on July 29, 2010 at 4:50 am ninotaziz

    Dear Moondustwriter,

    I love your name and your MFM.

    A twist – a profound lost instead of deep longing…



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