July 27, 2010 by moondustwriter
You ask
I answer
it’s not words
you are seeking
***
you answer
I look closely
striving for something
to grasp hold of
***
The question
freezes between us
it eludes the answer
like a game
of hide and seek
***
We coax and prod
searching not finding
not realizing it’s the search
which brings us together
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So much truth in that last stanza. Excellent.
writers are such wonderful people – it really is the journey
nice moon. sometimes it is the journey not the destination that gives us more what we need…happy oneshot!
I’m loving the journey and grateful for friends along the way
What a wonderful ending line. Wonderfully woven these questions and answers! VERY wel done! *hugs* April
Hugs to you my dear – but you know you are one who inspires me
Thank you. Sometimes I think we forget that we are not our words, we are the source of our words, and our words never quite express who we are. – Bill
yet we can get caught up in words. We can learn from silence and searching can’t we???
This poems has a tempo that I can only describe as tentative – suiting the subject by giving one that feeling of hesitation, when we try to suss out a new acquaintance and we’re not sure if we get them yet, or if they get us. Your last line sums it up perfectly, showing us that what they have in common – the search – is where they can begin. Nice work!
thanks Cindy – yes I guess like a first dance or a first meeting
You need one of those little ‘thumbs up’ icons to click. Love this. I put one up this week too. A change of pace poem for me.
thumbs up that you are posting on One Shot. Smiles from the Moon
Cool how you wrote this—the tone has this back-and-forth feel to it that emerges clearly through these quick lines. Well written, both in style and meaning.
glad you picked up on this. you are such a smartie
Exactly how I feel with most of the people I know, with the exception of writers. I love your style!
Simple eloquent poem. How many times do we ask others questions that maybe have no relevence? But it’s really the questions that we use to fuel our desire to get to know each other better.
that’s so true isnt it?? we have to start somewhere
I love the last stanza, it holds so much power! Keep the ink on the tip of your quill my dear friend. Bravo!!!
Aww thanks my dear, talented friend
You are so cool Moon….
What a creatively beautiful Mind..
Thanks….Galen
kind words from a friend
LOVELY!!! hahahah…you know, this is what my hubby and I tell each other
A very cleverly put poem.. it’s fantastic!
A neat one shot! Mine’s yet to come… phheewww
Communication and all it’s complexities.
Love from the Moon
Ah yes, the difficulties of communicating indeed. I love how your words dance around the point in this… or is it that they frame it perfectly?
So true that words are only a small part of the communication picture. Great poem, moondustwriter!
Thanks Talon – I guess as writers we can help bridge that gap
Yes very engaging. I love the way that you haves tructured your piece so they rythm gives it a quizzical feel so each stanza feel like a question or a possible answer
The saying £can’t see the wood for the trees” popped int my mind whilst reading your piece.
Thanks Gwei- glad you once again joined us on One Shot Wednesday
In Quakerism, we have a long tradition of seeking. I can remember a 90 year standing up in meeting explaining the history of his spiritual journey and the experience that no destination had all the answers. So one reading of this poem could also be a prayer. I do poetry for fun rather than publication so for this week only, I’ve nervously posted an example from each of my blogs: an Elegy from Scribbles and Diversions, a Gogyohka from Random Twitter Stories, and free verse poem from Random Short Stories.
“the search that brings us together”
so true.
you cut right straight to the bone on this one!
smiles,
thanks Jessie – smiles from the moon
As others have pointed out, it is the last two lines that really make this poem. Lovely one shot
thanks for liking my “shot”
This poem has a lovely structure, it feels kind of whimsical but it draws the reader to a deep place of searching.
love the search for the answers
looking for so much more than words..striving for something
to grasp hold of… love this – love this – love this!!!!
thanks for loving it
thats so true… beautifully expressed.
thanks so much
Beautiful thoughts here…I like that we have someone to search with…Heartspell
That is so true! Communication in a relationship is frequently a game of hide-and-seek. Maybe it’s that Mars and Venus thing.
Excellent job as always, Leslie.
LOVED THE LAST STANZA, VERY REAL, SUPERB DEAREST XXX
Ahh, the search, yes the search. The thrill of the hunt. The journey, not the destination.
you are very wise, as wonderful MoonDust Writer!
xo
I like poems about the process of poetry itself. I like the idea of the probe, defining what makes it poetry in each of us and to each of us. I have written many of these and I think your is a success and unusual in the sense that it is a revelation through dialog unusual in this type of poem. Bravo!
Well the problem with being the one of the last ones to comment because you spent a day at the beach is that all the good things to say have been said…so I’ll just say ‘ditto!’
hope the beach was great
moon,
you got me from the first stanza….You ask, I answer. It’s not words you are seeking.
For me this brings up that it is all about the feeling we are seeking or that state of being with another. And you are so right, it is the search that does bring two people together.
Simply love this poem. Happy one shot
xoxo
“We coax and prod
searching not finding
not realizing it’s the search
which brings us together”
So true, so true. Superbly stated, beautifully written. As they say, the journey’s where it’s at…the destination’s nothing compared to it.
A very spiritual journey thanks for taking us along on this mystical quest. A meaningful seeker, and a lovely poem.
Joanny
quite a journey for sure
Leslie … now I’ve got Simon and
Garfunkle singing in my head …
“Like a poem poorly written
We are verses out of rhythm,
Couplets out of rhyme,
In syncopated time
Lost in the dangling conversation
And the superficial sighs,
Are the borders of our lives.”
– Dangling Conversation
Cheers! MrBill (-;
loved Simon and Garfunkle
they are good to have stuck in the head
moon smiles and thanks
I love it when I read a friend’s poem and it doesn’t suck.
And that’s what this is, a poem that definitely does not suck.
Nice work, sincerely, I would mention my favorite line, but the whole damn thing is pretty damn good.
(sorry, it’s 2:50 in the AM right now, kinda loopy)
Tao – you make me laugh – thanks
you spoke my heart here !!! just what i was doing last night ..
Yes it’s all about the journey, thanks for sharing this great piece
haha this is a fun way of conveying wat u want to tell:)
or beat around the proverbial bush – eh???
Oh my! I love this. Conversations can be just this way, and what’s said can be so secondary to all the rest of it that’s going on and you’ve captured that beautifully.
Sorry to be so late in arriving, I am only just now catching up on One Shot Wednesday!
By the way…I love the way you sign off with “…from the Moon.” It’s cute and always makes me smile.
hi moonie yet another great poem..you really are flying with your verse…i think everyone has said it..the last stanza was superb..cheers Pete
Thanks Petey