“End of the Trail” ~ #flashfiction
I just read the paper:
“Marty Underpier
died at the age of 66.”
The coroner’s report
states time of death was 1pm
at Santa Monica pier”
“Hmm,” she thought, “wasn’t that when the women’s all american volleyball team was practicing on the beach?”
“Although he toppled over the pier,
coroners believe he drowned in his chowder.”
Thanks to G-Man for hosting the Friday Flash 55 every week. Please join us as we enjoy weekly fiction in 55 words at his expense.
Are you sure it wasn’t a heart attack. Sounds like his blood pressure may have been amped. Great 55, Moonie. My 55 is HERE .
January 20, 2011 at 4:57 pm
You would – there is that inference huh???
January 20, 2011 at 6:04 pm
Very witty and succinct. I really like how you did the sign too – for a moment there I thought it actually exists.
January 20, 2011 at 5:03 pm
Funny this 55 came as I was waking and it was too funny to pass up – my other 55 will go up next week. I wrote it minutes before the witching hour. I love writing!!!
January 20, 2011 at 6:04 pm
Clam Chowder or Corn Chowder?
Wry and Witty 55 MDW….
You Rock!
Thanks for playing, thanks for your fantastic support, and please have a Kick Ass Week-End…G
January 20, 2011 at 5:46 pm
clam would have been word #56
when you are on the coast you usually have fish, clam chowder. Tho some people have regular fare.
January 20, 2011 at 6:03 pm
Under the boardwalk he was havin’ some fun
Until his livin’, his livin’ was done.
I know, I’m so sad.
But happy to know you!!
xoxo
January 20, 2011 at 6:19 pm
Under the boardwalk… Maybe a little too much fun
January 20, 2011 at 7:50 pm
What an excellent 55! Very worthy of a chuckle. Mine is here. http://razzamadazzle.wordpress.com/2011/01/20/a-sunny-55/
January 20, 2011 at 6:33 pm
glad I got a chuckle – you and the goats stay warm
January 20, 2011 at 7:51 pm
Perhaps the coroners had had too much of something (not chowder) themselves? – I was thinking more along the lines of him being toppled by an errant volleyball – hard, especially when you don’t see it coming.
Nice 55!
January 20, 2011 at 6:36 pm
Ha – I love those angles – a bonk with the volleyball or they tied one on…
January 20, 2011 at 7:51 pm
Fun 55 Leslie! Definitely puts a smirk on everyone’s face (but his wife’s!)
January 20, 2011 at 6:49 pm
I guess not -wonder what the wife would think
January 20, 2011 at 7:52 pm
Ha – poor guy didn’t know what took him down
I tried one this week hope you will come by
thanks for your encouragement
January 20, 2011 at 7:20 pm
I will – glad to see you AW
January 20, 2011 at 7:52 pm
old ticker just couldnt take all those clams waving around…
January 20, 2011 at 7:33 pm
or something …
January 20, 2011 at 7:53 pm
Very funny and set in my very own locale! Yay!
Confession: I must have the dirtiest mind ever. I was thinking maybe the “chowder” they found wasn’t actually soup and that… oh, never mind. I think I’ll just have to go to the pier and do some investigating of my own.
Great 55. Have a fantastic weekend.
January 20, 2011 at 8:24 pm
heee heeee heeeee, nice one!!!
January 21, 2011 at 12:18 am
Love the irony in that sign. An excellent take.
January 21, 2011 at 12:52 am
Love that first image and what a fun post! And suddenly, all I can think of is going to the wharf…
January 21, 2011 at 1:13 am
Always a good day at the coast
January 21, 2011 at 6:46 am
Was it New England style or New York style? For ol’ Charlies sake I hope it was NY.
January 21, 2011 at 3:01 am
We dont have as much New York style in this coast but ya never know…
January 21, 2011 at 6:46 am
Poor guy! I can bet those volleyball players were scantily clad. It was just too much for our voyeur!
January 21, 2011 at 3:07 am
yes those scantily glad babes at the beach …
January 21, 2011 at 6:45 am
lol! I can’t help thinking he died with a smile on his face!
January 21, 2011 at 6:44 am
lol clever, women’s volleyball can have that effect on a fellow!
January 21, 2011 at 7:05 am
What an awful way to go (unless he enjoyed looking at the girls that much), but in a way his name predicted his fate.
January 21, 2011 at 7:16 am
glad you caught that ref to underpier
January 21, 2011 at 10:15 am
What a way to go!
http://faystoo.blogspot.com/2011/01/that-girl.html
January 21, 2011 at 8:32 am
yeh poor guy – lol never knew what hit him
January 21, 2011 at 10:14 am
very clever 55, one day i will come up with a story for fridays, so far barely any luck with poems. thanks for stopping by
January 21, 2011 at 9:10 am
I can understand how such a thing could happen….another clever write.
January 21, 2011 at 9:35 am
Thanks C – this one leapt onto the page
January 21, 2011 at 10:14 am
Ah, man, that was hysterical.
January 21, 2011 at 9:51 am
Sounds like it was all too much for him. :0
January 21, 2011 at 11:06 am
and then …
January 21, 2011 at 10:13 pm
This is a fun one!
January 21, 2011 at 12:02 pm
Thanks MZ
January 21, 2011 at 10:13 pm
hehehe…. (sad for him)… witty for us!
I guess he couldn’t digest the excess fun
Good one, Moonie!! (giggles)
January 21, 2011 at 9:08 pm
glad to get a giggle – I lighten up once a blue moon or so
January 21, 2011 at 10:13 pm
Wonderful 55!
nutty nuts
January 22, 2011 at 1:42 am
With my Reader, I got to see both your takes on this one. And although this is funny, the other one made me laugh out loud.
January 22, 2011 at 4:16 pm
isnt that cheating?- ha. So no surprises when I post the other …
January 22, 2011 at 9:02 pm