This entry was posted on January 20, 2012. It was filed under Poetry .

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   tashtoo

   That final line speaks so clearly to the freedom, and what we will endure to get it! Fantastic!

   January 20, 2012 at 2:22 pm
   

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   slpmartin

   A much darker ending than I had originally thought it would be…interesting ending.

   January 20, 2012 at 2:35 pm
   

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   Nuria Coe

   Wow. I love a good punch line. It went from rated G to PG 13 in one sentence.

   January 20, 2012 at 7:24 pm
   

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   John Ross Barnes

   Good to see you posting more again. Appears as though you’re working through some stuff or else doing some really good imagining. Either way, good on ya.

   January 20, 2012 at 8:37 pm
   

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5. 

   knightsheart

   Darkly evocative writing!
   Thank you for sharing it.

   January 20, 2012 at 11:16 pm
   

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   Rajlakshmi

   wooa the last line is hard hitting!!!! amazing!!!

   January 21, 2012 at 5:11 am
   

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   Bruce Sallan (@BruceSallan)

   OY!, you got me with the last line…surprised me!

   January 21, 2012 at 9:48 am
   

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   Joseph Pinto, horror author

   I love the dark side of you, Leslie! This was very well done!

   January 22, 2012 at 12:48 pm
   

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   scottf

   whew, wow… stark and cold

   nice

   January 22, 2012 at 5:40 pm
   

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    Daydreamertoo

    Ouch… nothing hurts more than the pain of love. deep, dark, painful.

    January 25, 2012 at 11:33 am
    

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    Jen C Hay

    Hi, I’ve nominated you for The Versatile Blogger Award. If you want more info, click here (If technology stops hating on me and actually works this time! ) >> http://jenchay.wordpress.com/2012/01/30/abc-award-versatile-blogger-award-and-7×7-link-award/

    January 30, 2012 at 11:30 am
    

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