Can’t Kill the Thirst #flash fiction #retro #fridayfictioneers
Thirsty
Another night banging around in the trashcans of Newcago, I needed a drink. A tall one and a Cheesesteak at Tony’s would do nicely.
I noticed the dame – she was a looker. I couldn’t get a read on the guy beneath the brim.
“Yeah, the regular,” I nodded. Sally and I go back to days when drinks came from the hose in the horse’s mouth.
I couldn’t help but hear dollface gagging. I rushed to stop her fall. Too late – white stuff was bubbling from her mouth, her eyes glazed over.
Something besides the guy under the shadowy brim was missin- a large sparkler around her wrist.
“Baby, Newcago is not like life on the farm…
…Playing is for keeps.”
A new week for writing flash fiction over at Friday Fictioneers with a host of fiction writers. As you can see the picture prompt may mean you’ll find a bit of hay stuck between the pages but please go over and check out some of the excellent writers. Thanks to Rochelle for keeping us thirsty for more…
If you’d like to read the first of this flash fiction serial set in the sleepy town (cough, cough) of Newcago have a gander.
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Great stylistics!
thanks Pirate
Dear moondustwriter,
Lovely how you worked Mystic and the hose into your sparkling story.
Aloha,
Doug
at least we know the horse didnt do it in this story
Nice way you tied the story to the picture. I was wondering when I saw it was a Newcago story.
Old and new…somethings never change. Nice addition.
Thanks for your visit.
no that’s the truth
burglary, murder just to name two
SO glad I’m in the burbs, dollface. where drinks don’t come for a hose, unless you’re watering the lawn. I wonder when I read stories about the future or sci-fi, why the expectations are always bad and, in most movies at least, it rains most of the time. :-
Hope all’s better than this in Chi-town,
janet
not sure if this is future or just a town set in another time zone
I’ll keep the rain to a minimum
thanks for the visit
Reminded of those old B&W films.
thanks that’s where I believe I am aiming. Not in the future or the past in the old film world
“Another night banging around in the trashcans…” I told you to stop stalking me. LOL
Fun read – a little noir pony action…
well stop hanging out in my turf sista…
well then how’my supposed to stalk you? LOL
Reminded me of Mickey Spillaine or something like that.
Also clever. I really liked this one!
I can almost hear a sax in the background. good stuff.
I think I’ll avoid Tony’s…those tall cold ones are killers. Trying to envision drinks from the garden hose from the horse’s mouth. Different.
Shalom
Rochelle
Great take on the prompt, nicely done.
Newcago sounds like a Mystic(al) place. You included the phor prompt very nicely.
fantastic. glad you decided to continue the Newcago story ^^ it’s great how you connected the photo with the story
Nicely done.
Very noir. I like it.
Cool tale.
I liked this take, and really thought the way you worked the prompt in was smooth and fit nicely.
Interesting idea – getting drinks from a horse’s mouth! Nice to see Newcago again
A great story. And I love how you weaved the horse into a story like this.
that was a stretch wasnt it?
Different and unique… a take on “Get Shorty” style.
trying to create a noir type feel/ thanks
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