Gathering Bodies #noir #flashfiction #newcago


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No one in NewCago remembered why the area was barred.

One man went exploring with waders on. Before dawn, he pulled a body out of the aqueduct. The on-duty police were happy behind their bars  so no one observed the nightly doings of the man  in muddy brown. He called them “subjects.”  They were- Subjects of Doom.

Pets were found with life sucked out of them and now a few elderly.

Sam encountered a “subject” on his night off. “More like a shadow taking what it doesn’t possess…” He shook with trepidation.

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Weekly Rochelle at Friday Fictioneers hosts a 100 word Flash Fiction. She gives us a photograph as a prompt and then the Fictioneers let their imaginations go. Today the picture is shared by Sarah Ann Hall. Come by and read the fantastic fiction being written this week.

This is another 100 word offering being added to a  growing series of stories all set in NewCago. There are many loose strings, unanswered questions about this metropolitan society that is sinking into the mire. Sam seems to be the only one to keep the bad doings at bay but how much longer???

Week 8 in Newcago serial No place to hide

Week 7 in Newcago serial They were Pink

Week 6 In Newcago Serial You poison filled wasps

Week 5 in Newcago Serial The Doom Cycle

Week 4 in Newcago Serial Helpless

Week 3 in Newcago Serial When the Lights Go On

week 2 in Newcago Serial  Can’t Kill The Thirst

Week 1 in Newcago Serial Secret Weapon

34 thoughts on “Gathering Bodies #noir #flashfiction #newcago

  1. Very menacing writing, but I am a little confused. Are the ‘subjects’ the bodies in the aquaduct? (As the man calls them) Or are they shadows (i.e. up and moving around, even if still dead?)

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    1. Heck, I’d have clicked, too.I wedonr if it would have been more effective if, after he returned to the webpage, there was a quasi-description of the image he’d been tempted by, and the suggestion of what it really was that he hadn’t noticed the first time because he didn’t look closely enough? The strongest part here, other than glamourous’ etc, is the horrified part, and I like to have a bit more information about that. Not so much as to give it away, but to play up the confused expectations.Am I making any sense?

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    1. Hmm, I got a different take on it than the otrehs, I guess. Maybe it was the content’ part and maybe I’m too willing to believe in such. Heh. I also got out of it that she was waiting for her last son to die before she did, which did seem a bit odd but maybe she’s an EVIL little old lady. Heh heh. Anyway, if I might suggest putting the old’ in that second mention of her so that every time you refer to her it’s always little old lady. Nice parallelism, there.

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    1. Heck, I’d have clicked, too.I wdeonr if it would have been more effective if, after he returned to the webpage, there was a quasi-description of the image he’d been tempted by, and the suggestion of what it really was that he hadn’t noticed the first time because he didn’t look closely enough? The strongest part here, other than glamourous’ etc, is the horrified part, and I like to have a bit more information about that. Not so much as to give it away, but to play up the confused expectations.Am I making any sense?

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    1. Sweet story a bit fairytale-like. I love the idea of the gulf that seaprated her from the world, and the fact that she was content to wait. I didn’t see this as sad you said she was content, so I’m assuming she was and she had her cats and her cabbage soup after all

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